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Reposting of content of bad prose collection, without attribution, implying that it was written by poster. Request for concrit.

Date: 2012-08-08 04:55 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] onyxlynx
Fanthorpean.

Date: 2012-08-09 12:18 am (UTC)
onyxlynx: The words "Obscene Dendarii drinking songs priceless for a fast-penta interrogation." (Obscene Dendarii Drinking Songs)
From: [personal profile] onyxlynx
Missing attribution applied later in original. Examples scanned and compared to extra-auctorial database. Match hinted with Lionel Fanthorpe. Adjectivized surname. Typed. Posted.

Date: 2012-08-10 04:46 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] onyxlynx
Recommendation that Ms. Ros cultivate terseness. Distress at being unable to scan samples without wincing with horror and rejecting the computer. Uncontrollable desire to prune out every second and third word. Desperate hope that there might be a few drams of nepenthe somewhere in the apartment. Sentence diagramming. Extravagant use of blue pencil.

IOW, brevity and succinctness should be watchwords. If not commandments.

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